Line edits are where the real magic happens. You’ve got the
plot and characters nice and solid, the setting’s good and your scenes contain
plenty of action and conflict. Now, in line edits, you get to give your writing
the polish it needs to really stand out and grab readers. Today I’d like to
share five quick line editing tips to help your writing be tighter, more vivid,
and engage your readers more in this awesome story you’ve written. These tips
are also great to keep in mind when you’re first writing your book too.
Slay the Passive
Voice: Passive voice is often what makes an action filled scene feel flat.
Take a look at this sentence: “Jane was being chased”. Jane is the focus of
this sentence. But Jane isn’t actually doing anything. Instead, something is
being done to her. This is passive voice. Now let’s turn the sentence around so
Jane isn’t the focus. “The zombie chased Jane.” Now the sentence is active, and
much more interesting. If you think a sentence might be passive, try adding the
words ‘by a zombie’ to it. If it still makes sense, it’s written in the passive
voice. Taking our first example: “Jane was being chased by a zombie.” See how
that works?
Delete Filter Words:
Filter words distance readers from the main character. A close point of view helps
readers connect with your main character. But filter words, words like ‘thought’
and ‘felt’ break the connection between the reader and the main character. For example:
“The street was dark and forbidding. Just the right place for a zombie attack,
Jane thought.” Instantly we’re spectating, not inside Jane’s head, experiencing
the spooky street. This is really easy to fix. In most cases, you can take out
the filter words and the sentence will be fine.
Remove Some Adverbs:
Adverbs are words that modify verbs and often end in the letters –ly. For
example: “Jane ran quickly towards the door.” The word ‘quickly’ is an adverb.
Often, these words aren’t needed and can be replaced by stronger verbs. For
example: “Jane sprinted for the door.” Here the weak verb and adverb
combination has been replaced by a much stronger verb. However, don’t be afraid
to keep an adverb if it’s necessary. In this sentence for example, leaving the
adverb would be totally fine: “The door swung gently on one hinge.”
Be Wary of the Phrase
‘Started To’: In many cases, the phrase ‘started to’ is useless. Take a
look at this example: “Jane started to hammer on the door.” Here, the words ‘started
to’ could be cut with no problem at all. Removing those words leaves you with: “Jane
hammered on the door.” Now the sentence is shorter, more active, and much nicer
to read. There are some places to use ‘started to’, like in this sentence: “Jane
started to hammer on the door, but was interrupted by a zombie.” Here the
phrase shows that the character began a task but was interrupted before they
could complete it.
Look Out ‘Weasel
Words’: Weasel words are words that creep into your writing over and over
again, even when you don’t mean to use them. Does your character always quirk an
eyebrow? Or sigh a lot? Maybe things always happen ‘suddenly’. These are all
examples of common weasel words. Have a read through and see if any words turn
up repeatedly. Switching out your weasel words keeps your writing fresh and
interesting. Weasel words can be almost any word too, so if you want an example
of other words to look out for, Stephanie Morrill@Go Teen Writers has an
excellent list of her weasel words for you to look at.
These are my five tips.
What would you add to this list? Are any of these tips new to you? And would
you be interested in seeing a part two?
Also, as you can tell, I am back from my unannounced
blogging break and very happy to be back to blogging once more, with a new
burst of inspiration. Thank you for all being so patient while I took time away
from the blog.
These are all really great tips! I especially like the tip about 'Slaying Passive Voice."
ReplyDeleteThanks for the advice, and welcome back!
-Bailey
Thanks Bailey. It's nice to be back and blogging again.
DeleteAll of these are tips I will keep in mind when it comes to the editing stage! I have a problem with weasel voice; the habit is starting to go away now, but it still lurks in old drafts.
ReplyDeletexoxo Morning
Coming back to edit old drafts is hard when you see all your old mistakes, isn't it? But at least then you can see how much you've progressed.
DeleteThanks for the tips, I will keep them in mind while writing:)
ReplyDelete~Kitty
You're welcome. I hope you find some of them useful.
DeleteThese are amazing tips! I will definitely keep these in mind :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you found them useful. Thanks for stopping by Arushee!
DeleteOoh, these are really important tips! Other than started to, I also eliminate managed to, tried to, and other words that describe the extent to which something is done. I have a real trouble with "weasel words", as you put them -- heart is one of the more atrocious examples. I actually have a blog post lined up about my overused/favourite words.
ReplyDeleteOh yes, though are great words to eliminate where possible. Heart is a really sneaky word. I've heard quite a few people say that word likes to creep in. Oooh, that will be an interesting post. I'll have to keep an eye for it.
DeleteI loved this! I especially like points 1, 3, and 4, they were so helpful, because I tend to use a lot of filler words, etc. I'd definitely be interested in a part two!
ReplyDeleteI wanted to let you know that I tagged you for the Favorite Screen Characters tag over at my blog http://oyescribes.blogspot.com/, if you're interested in participating!
Point number one is my favourite ever. I take no credit for the zombie solution, but I had to share it because it was so amazing. I have a whole second post of points brainstormed, so I hope to have part two up in the near future. Thanks so much for tagging me.
DeleteThank you thank you thank you!
ReplyDeleteHaha, you're very welcome!
DeleteI had a good laugh at "Weasel Words". I've never quite heard it put like that before. I'm definitely guilty of that though.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the tips! Line edits are DEFINITELY what can make or break a piece.
I'm so guilty of the whole weasel words thing. It's embarassing. THIS IS SO HELPFUL OMG
ReplyDeleteI'm not ready to start weeding out weasel words yet, but this a post I'm definitely going to save for when I'm working on line-by-line edits! I think I am most guilty of "started to" because I am just... I like saying when things started and then stringing out the actions that followed. It's not really my most effective way to work, but that is what editing is for, no?
ReplyDeletethanks for this advice! these items really make the writing work more shining! I also use http://royalediting.com/usage-tips-of-passive-voice in case of using passive voice!
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