Writing Excerpt: Trapped in an Elevator
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Once again it's time for a writing excerpt. As well as writing my novel this camp, I've also been working on a few random scenes for character development and relaxation. It's been very interesting to see how my character reaction in situations outside of their book. Today's two excerpts come from two different random scenes. I hope you enjoy them!
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This excerpt comes from a scene where the mutant team is having a day off and going to the beach.
“Are we nearly there?” Nicola whined.
“Nearly.” Megan sounded pretty testy by now. Nicola had been
asking the same question over and over for the past hour. She was worse than
any child to travel with. “You know, asking that question over and over again
doesn’t actually make us get there any faster.”
“I know. But I want to know how soon we’re going to be
there. Do you know how long it’s been since I was at the beach? I haven’t been
since I grew a tail and gave up surfing.” Nicola’s mutant power was the grow a
tail and gills when she touched water, a bit like a mermaid. Which made her
favourite pastime of surfing a bit impossible.
“Well, we’re going to be another ten minutes,” Jonathon
said. He was a genius, but at the moment he seemed more like an excited kid
than a guy with a massively clever brain.
Sara grinned round at everyone. “I love the beach. I want to
make a sandcastle,” she said.
“Isn’t that a bit babyish?” Eric, a mutant with icy powers,
asked. “People our age don’t make sandcastles, do they? Or did I miss
something?”
“I always make a sandcastle when I go to the beach,” Sara
said. “You don’t have to make one. I’m not going to force you to. But if anyone
wants to join in, then they’re most welcome to.” She gripped her sand shovel
tighter. “Are we nearly there Megan?”
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This excerpt comes from a scene where four of the mutants are trapped in an elevator.
“You’re the one who wants to do something,” Eric pointed
out. “I’d rather go to sleep until they’ve got this thing all fixed up, but I
highly doubt that that’s going to happen with you here.”
“You’re one to talk Snow boy. I swear it’s getting colder in
here just because you’re in here.” Nicola scooted away from him a little. “Can
you stop that?”
“At least I’m keeping the air in here comfortable. It could
get really hot with four of us in here for a while. You should be thanking me
for my services,” Eric said. “I should charge you all for this.”
“You could hire yourself out as the human air conditioner,”
Nicola said. “That could be your second career. I bet you could make a killing
doing that. Until you forgot that not everyone likes Antarctic conditions and
froze someone’s eyebrows off.”
“I don’t think you can freeze someone’s eyebrows off,” Sara
said. “I think you can only burn them off. I wonder what you’d look like with
no eyebrows Nicola.”
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How's your Camp NaNoWriMo going? Got any excerpts to share with me? Are you looking forward to the last week of Camp? I can't believe we've come so far already.
2 comments
You are such a wonderful writer! I always enjoy reading your work.
ReplyDeleteI like your idea of writing about your characters outside of the novel.
Thank you so much Charlie. I am always very nervous about sharing my writing, so I'm so glad to hear your enjoyed reading it. I've been finding writing about my characters outside of the book to be very interesting. It's fun to find out how they react to other situations, especially considering my characters don't always get a lot of downtime in my books.
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